Memo Assignment

To: Professor Moody

From: Kellsey Bishop

Date: September 15, 2009

RE: Feedback from peer review


I am writing to you this in regarding the feedback from my peer review. I am going to incorporate the ideas suggested by my fellow student reviewing my introduction I had previously written. The corrections include some grammatical mistakes and adding more details in my introduction allowing the reader to know that my friend Anthony I was writing about had passed away rather than keeping it a surprise until the end. Also I have taken some of their suggestions in going about finishing my memoir. Instead of just listing of the events that took place that day, I am letting the audience read it through my eyes. This way I will give better details in depth by showing it through my eyes. Hope I will be able to accomplish my goal that the reader is not just reading the story but feels as if he or she is there willing everything is happening.

I am also going to look closely at the rubric show to us today in class, which is linked on your blog page and try to follow the best ratings as close as possible. This way my writing skills will improve and my memoir will be the best it can be rather than just free writing without looking at any guidelines. The rubric will always give me better insight on how to use more details and visuals in my memoir rather than just the bare minimum.

As a result of using the feedback from the peer review and completely understanding the rubric given for the memoir assignment, I feel that my memoir should be headed in the right direction. By adding better details and more insight on how everything passed through me it will give more signifance to the event that took place in fourth grade and how it shaped the relationships I have today. Also by following the guidelines in the rubric and understanding them it will help me develop in a better writer for not only this assignment, but future papers that will be assigned throughout my life.